Snow hidden murder

[Magpie Tales #44]

The snow falls
freezing you to
my heart

I become numb
at long last

The cold you
have mastered
enraptures me
with it's icy grasp

There you lay
in a bed of white
still, quiet, naked
preserved dead

And I
just slide away
as the snow falls

32 comments:

  1. LolamouseDecember 8, 2010 at 9:19 AM

    this one makes me just want to cry for some reason. who was it?

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  2. Crayotic RamblingsDecember 8, 2010 at 9:23 AM

    The addict, the alcoholic, the victim I once was.

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  3. cosmos camiDecember 8, 2010 at 9:35 AM

    Beautiful
    Loved:freezing you to
    my heart

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  4. JinksyDecember 8, 2010 at 9:41 AM

    And your white Blog pages add to this snowy feel admirably!

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  5. FireblossomDecember 8, 2010 at 9:44 AM

    *shiver*

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  6. AnonymousDecember 8, 2010 at 9:54 AM

    death of the addiction....brilliant piece my friend. I know I gush over most everything you write, but it is all amazing,truly:)

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  7. Kathe W.December 8, 2010 at 9:57 AM

    wow- powerful

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  8. jabblogDecember 8, 2010 at 12:16 PM

    'And I
    just slide away
    as the snow falls'

    I like these lines, the feeling of departing.

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  9. LeahDecember 8, 2010 at 12:22 PM

    And I/just slide away

    Is amazing. Excellent piece.

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  10. Doctor FTSEDecember 8, 2010 at 1:15 PM

    Marvellously alive with cold.

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  11. RebeccaDecember 8, 2010 at 2:53 PM

    i love the line where you say " i just slide away" makes me feel like you found a better way to live and moved on..bravo well done

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  12. melDecember 8, 2010 at 5:17 PM

    lol - i'm joining David in a gush-fest.

    you rock my world, Mr.Rabbit-man. ;)

    so much strength here....and the image of you sliding away -- perfect, just perfect.

    xo

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  13. Glenn ButtkusDecember 8, 2010 at 5:25 PM

    I like the lines /still. quiet, naked/
    preserved dead/ for it opens the
    door to other symbols and
    interpretations. Interesting and
    very chilling take on a movie
    sled and moody poem from
    Willow. I thought I was out there
    with my mag about the now,
    today, late fall, the day John
    Lennon died--but you are
    arctic leagues beyond me
    in some white wildnerness
    of wild poetics, Good job.

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  14. Kristen HaskellDecember 8, 2010 at 6:45 PM

    The second verse I love it!

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  15. AnonymousDecember 8, 2010 at 6:48 PM

    "And I
    just slide away
    as the snow falls "

    wonderful lines to end this great poem with..
    well done my friend!!!

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  16. ReflectionsDecember 8, 2010 at 10:35 PM

    Powerful piece, love 'And I slide away as the snow falls' to where the whiteness entraps.

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  17. UnknownDecember 9, 2010 at 12:50 AM

    You have a way, sir...

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  18. TrellissimoDecember 9, 2010 at 4:22 AM

    I can feel the icicles...

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  19. Tess KincaidDecember 9, 2010 at 7:45 AM

    Dark, cold and packs a chilling punch!

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  20. gautami tripathyDecember 9, 2010 at 8:08 AM

    Cold, and so sad...I like this..

    who hid that story for us to find

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  21. Strummed WordsDecember 9, 2010 at 8:50 AM

    The coldness of love, non-love? Intriguing.

    New Snow

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  22. Other MaryDecember 9, 2010 at 10:44 AM

    Very eerie. Reminds me (in a good way) a bit of that song by The Todies, Possum Kingdom.

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  23. Coloring Outside the LinesDecember 9, 2010 at 11:20 AM

    Powerful piece..."I become numb at long last"...

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  24. HelenDecember 9, 2010 at 11:41 AM

    Brrrrrrrrrrrrrr.

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  25. hedgewitchDecember 9, 2010 at 12:30 PM

    The cold has a seductive quality even as it freezes you--they say the pleasantest way to die is to freeze to death, but like you, I'd just as soon slide away.

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  26. Jhon BakerDecember 9, 2010 at 5:49 PM

    wow brother - I will have to really try hard to match this.

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  27. UnknownDecember 9, 2010 at 7:27 PM

    the creeper is a creepin'

    this was darkly spectacular.

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  28. AnonymousDecember 10, 2010 at 9:45 AM

    Sadly uplifting and cold in a warmhearted way - superb - i think i'll read it again

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  29. philDecember 11, 2010 at 11:47 AM

    Sparse and chilling.

    Perfect!

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  30. Everyday GoddessDecember 12, 2010 at 8:27 AM

    excellently written, i felt the finality.

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  31. C.M. JacksonDecember 13, 2010 at 8:22 PM

    i feel the isolation and loss--well done!

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  32. HarleyqMarch 16, 2011 at 3:50 PM

    Okay Rabbit.... you got me with this one. I find it original and clearly defined. I dare you to make me smile!

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