I want to smash
your face in
for all your
false airs
pretention
and oh woe is me
destroy the vanity
on which you live
amid perfumed finery
and all the right labels
expose you
to the glare of day
outside your cavern
and your soft
white lights
break backs
and hide your remains
for the garbage man
i want to smash
in
your face
send shards flying
in a spatter painted Pollock
of smirk and blood
(but it's a fucking expensive mirror)
Very powerful and what a twist at the end.
ReplyDeleteOh my, easy does it. Powerful but spine-chilling!
ReplyDeletenever break the mirror my friend;) This one is spot on!
ReplyDeletewell, that's just freaky! wait'll you read mine.....*insert Twilight Zone music here*
ReplyDeletethese ones make me flinch and want to turn away -- but i like that you're making me look....it's something i need to see.
thank you.
xo
fabulous. I love it when it makes me smile at the end
ReplyDeleteLMAO - Good write throughout..my kind of work there.
ReplyDeleteI guess you told him!
ReplyDeleteWonderful twist at the end. Enjoyed this!
ReplyDeleteKnow the feeling. At times have even wished for the freedom to act on it, but far better to write a scathing poem and be done with the ugliness without having it suck you in and own you. Good and honest piece.
ReplyDeletedidn't see that one coming! laughing uneasily...
ReplyDeleteYou could just draw a funny moustache or an eyepatch on the mirror, something to wipe the smirk off that face you see.
ReplyDelete(Cheaper to clean a mirror than replace it!)
Tewwiffic One Shot, you wascally wabbit!
OOO you make the smashing and crashing quite vivid in this piece
ReplyDeletePollack is painting in blood eh???
Thanks for sharing with One Shot
moon Smiles
dont we all have these days?
ReplyDeleteNice turnabout at the end. Effectively sharp, short and violent - this is how angry poetry is supposed to be written!:)
ReplyDeletelast line says it all - how we have been there and there and there... regretfully so often.
ReplyDeleteStill love and vote for this one too :)
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